Thursday, February 18, 2016
100 wc 8
Castle
Bursting through the hallways battling goblins, gouls, spiders and trolls. They were all guarding the treasure and I was going to do everything it takes to get it. Finally the door opened and there it was the treasure though it open quite interestingly instead of open in sense. It disintegrates and rebuilds itself anyway, I take the treasure and run off but then I fall and fall until there is nothing left but...darkness.
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That was a great story! BUt you might want to work on your detail.
ReplyDeleteBe sure to read your story out loud to yourself, to a peer and to an adult. You start your story off really strong but the middle and end become confusing. I am not sure what you are trying to say with the sentence "Finally the door opened and there it was the treasure though it open quite interestingly instead of open in sense." Continue to work on fluency in your writing.
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